As far as rewrites of erotica for the characters of Vegeta and Bulma, I gotta be honest: this story fits the characters’ personalities (fanon at least) pretty well. When you read this, make sure to keep in mind that BMG forced Dragon Ball characters into the roles of a former story. When I read I really struggled with characterization and had to remind myself of that.
Let’s talk about my biggest issue with this story as a whole. Vegeta flat out sexually assaults and harasses Bulma… like constantly in the first half of the story. Like he basically tells her that he will change her mind about men forever if she will just let him fuck her? I really hate that message and shame on Probst for writing that into her original story. Even more horrifying then the idea of a man being so brazen to say that he will change her life forever, is the idea that a woman who has never been able to turn her mind off long enough to have an orgasm gets off once and changes her whole identity and life goals to be with said man. At one point she legit says she doesn’t care about what happens with her company, which is totally out of character for her. I mean sure, she’s having some great sex, but bitch get your money!
Now I will say that this story had some A+++ smut scenes. I would low key read this just for that. I would skip over the awful and demeaning story and just read the smut. Vegeta is dominating and the voice he has is panty dropping. Like he legit says some shit that was so disgustingly hot I had to fan myself. I also liked how slow the smut was. We didn’t just go right in for the goal. Like Vegeta hangs out down there and touches her literally everywhere except her business, almost like he actually was interested in making her feel good. I really liked that, it made these scenes feel like two people who genuinely were attracted to each other doing those things you do with people you wanna make feel good.
So I really had major issues with the overarching story of this one (sexual harassment for example is no bueno), so I can’t in good faith recommend reading it all the way through. But I will say that you should find the smutty scenes and give THOSE a good read cause damn they are fantastic. If you want a great story with believable characterizations/world building and relationships, I would skip this piece. If you are on the other hand looking for some fantastic sex scenes to get you in the mood for… things, I would completely recommend this.
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